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Dreams Fold Back (3in1 Challenge)

December 9th 2007 21:28
I find challenges hard and don't do many these days, but this one piqued my interest... i was given 10 words to include in my poem, like that isn't hard enough, we had to make the first stanza; a tanka (5,7,5,7,7), the second stanza; a dodoitsu (7,7,7,5), and the third; a haiku (5,7,5) ...soooo here is my attempt...

~

cobble you, thatch me
in gardens of artistry
wills and wants paw soft
at smudges of simile
teeth, an opal honesty

traffic blooms at dusk’s baton
and dreams fold back into trees
sleepy gold participant
umber strokes your gleam

chain back the curtain
herald the play of visions
possibility


~Lily

~

suggestions for a title?? my brain is mush...


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Comment by The Rusty Can

December 13th 2007 04:06
the first thing that came to mind was 'framed vividity'...

love the line, and dreams fold back into trees

Rusty.

Comment by Lily

December 14th 2007 11:31
i like that line too Rusty, so i've decided to call it 'dreams fold back'. Much thankU's for reading me, and visiting my blog, and thank you for your suggestion too. i hope your weekend is fantabulous!

~Lily


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